5SC Haunted House by Elijah

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There ar some black bats.
The white gosts are sorownding the gardan.
It looks like zombes ar coming.
There’s a grave stone thats dark.
Thers lots of wood on the hauntid howse.

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2 comments on “5SC Haunted House by Elijah

  1. Hello Elijah,

    I liked the haunted house picture you have on your blog. I looked carefully and saw you had seen many interesting but spooky things. You also remembered capitals and full stops. Well done.

    Ross Mannell (Team 5SC)
    Teacher (retired), N.S.W., Australia

  2. Hi Elijah,

    You have used some really interesting words to tell us about the picture. I really liked it when you said the ghosts are ‘surrounding’ the haunted house. You have also remembered to use full stops, capital letters and an apostrophe on ‘there’s’, well done!
    You have told us about lots of the spooky things in the picture, next time could you use some more describing words to tell us how spooky the things in the picture are?
    Keep up the fantastic work!
    Grace Kingsman
    Trainee Teacher, Roehampton, London.

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